I was drunk as a fish when I wrote this. So no you can't laugh too much over this one.
Seething through your veins
A surge of anger passes
Down the memory lanes
Violent, maverick clashes
The darkness overcomes
And you can’t set yourself free
The chains of indifference
Make you blind and you can’t see
Venomous tasteful desires
Creeping through your veins
Light of a thousand pyres
Down your memory lanes
Seeping from the shadows
A discerning twinge of gloom
Hits you deep inside
And takes you to your doom
Now the anger is gone
And fear is here instead
You can’t sleep for too long
You twist and turn in bed
Your mind is now capsized
By the wilderness vile
And your heart is incised
Into pieces fragile
Hold on to your broken soul
Don’t wander too far
Or get sucked into the black hole
And soon you’ll be that dead star
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27 comments:
wow! if ur tht brilliant whn ur drunk... then i dun even wanna knw hw awesome u are whn sober!!! it wud giv me a complex!!hehe :)
great work!
Annie.
@ rassum and sambhar
only when u r drunk u get such high thoughts is it??
wow... that was REALLY REALLY good swati :) brilliant!
Hold on to your broken soul
Don’t wander too far
Or get sucked into the black hole
And soon you’ll be that dead star
... best lines :)
You are good even when you are drunk !!!
Thanks you guys :) You're too giving with your compliments
@ Lance... rassum and sambhar? :-|
If you wrote this when you were drunk, I would like to believe you are normal when you are drunk :P
Great writeup, the first two stanza sounded more like a song...
Thanks, Kertz :)
Really nice!!! I like the drunkenness :) Keep it up!
Haha I like the drunkenness too Ki, thanks :o)
lol sorry it came in a flow :P rassum and frassum :))
:P It's aite Lance
Uh, incidentally,
Fish act the way they do because of their memory capactity, which is ever so little.
So, you probably were "drunk like a skunk" (uh, pardon.)
And oh, impressive work.
^^Thanks,but the phrase drunk as a fish has a different connotation. Fish swim with their mouth open all the time and hence look like they're drinking. But this phrase is used to express one's drinking capacity, not the drunken state so you DO have a point. Thanks for reading!
BRILLIANT:-)
Thanks, Chew :-)
lolz. HAIL drunkenness!!! heheh
hi5!!
i remember postin a comment here...hmmm...
anyway u shud b drunk more often :)
As per thy request to panegyrize thy verse:Henceforth only mellifluous utterances extolling thy beauty(as conveyed in thy verse) shall be elucidated by my tongue. (hic!)
nice poem! (hic!)
Yup! me not sober! (hic!)
P.S First time: Hi!!
@Annie - Oooooh yeah :D
@Mayz - OK now I have someone to blame my drunkenness on! :D
@Phatsez - Hi to you too and thanks for reading! *Hands you beer*
nicely done!!~ :)
-Anu
ILMB
WOW! That was brilliant! :)
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Wow! If this is a drunken stupor, wonder what alert rambling can be
Btw what were you drunk on...I too got drunk recently; read my stuff
Phenomenally brilliant poetry!
May you be doused with alcohol all your life, if you were to come up with such brilliant words in an inebriated state!
Cheers to you!
Manu won the title!! CHelsea suckeyth suckery suckyeth !!
Now the anger is gone
And fear is here instead
I hate wen this happens !!! wonderful post ! i liked it :)
@Omie - And who won the FA Cup? Mancs suck!
@Lost- Thanks :) Glad you could relate
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