Saturday, April 11, 2009

Dementia

I was drunk as a fish when I wrote this. So no you can't laugh too much over this one.

Seething through your veins
A surge of anger passes
Down the memory lanes
Violent, maverick clashes
The darkness overcomes
And you can’t set yourself free
The chains of indifference
Make you blind and you can’t see

Venomous tasteful desires
Creeping through your veins
Light of a thousand pyres
Down your memory lanes
Seeping from the shadows
A discerning twinge of gloom
Hits you deep inside
And takes you to your doom

Now the anger is gone
And fear is here instead
You can’t sleep for too long
You twist and turn in bed
Your mind is now capsized
By the wilderness vile
And your heart is incised
Into pieces fragile

Hold on to your broken soul
Don’t wander too far
Or get sucked into the black hole
And soon you’ll be that dead star

27 comments:

IcE MaiDeN said...

wow! if ur tht brilliant whn ur drunk... then i dun even wanna knw hw awesome u are whn sober!!! it wud giv me a complex!!hehe :)

great work!
Annie.

Lancelot said...

@ rassum and sambhar

only when u r drunk u get such high thoughts is it??

Elithraniel Arawion said...

wow... that was REALLY REALLY good swati :) brilliant!

Elithraniel Arawion said...

Hold on to your broken soul
Don’t wander too far
Or get sucked into the black hole
And soon you’ll be that dead star

... best lines :)

Thoorika said...

You are good even when you are drunk !!!

BloggerMouth said...

Thanks you guys :) You're too giving with your compliments

@ Lance... rassum and sambhar? :-|

Kertz said...

If you wrote this when you were drunk, I would like to believe you are normal when you are drunk :P

Great writeup, the first two stanza sounded more like a song...

BloggerMouth said...

Thanks, Kertz :)

ki said...

Really nice!!! I like the drunkenness :) Keep it up!

BloggerMouth said...

Haha I like the drunkenness too Ki, thanks :o)

Lancelot said...

lol sorry it came in a flow :P rassum and frassum :))

BloggerMouth said...

:P It's aite Lance

Surreptitious Shogun said...

Uh, incidentally,

Fish act the way they do because of their memory capactity, which is ever so little.

So, you probably were "drunk like a skunk" (uh, pardon.)

And oh, impressive work.

BloggerMouth said...

^^Thanks,but the phrase drunk as a fish has a different connotation. Fish swim with their mouth open all the time and hence look like they're drinking. But this phrase is used to express one's drinking capacity, not the drunken state so you DO have a point. Thanks for reading!

chewmysambhar said...

BRILLIANT:-)

BloggerMouth said...

Thanks, Chew :-)

IcE MaiDeN said...

lolz. HAIL drunkenness!!! heheh
hi5!!

Mayz said...

i remember postin a comment here...hmmm...

anyway u shud b drunk more often :)

DPhatsez said...

As per thy request to panegyrize thy verse:Henceforth only mellifluous utterances extolling thy beauty(as conveyed in thy verse) shall be elucidated by my tongue. (hic!)

nice poem! (hic!)

Yup! me not sober! (hic!)

P.S First time: Hi!!

BloggerMouth said...

@Annie - Oooooh yeah :D
@Mayz - OK now I have someone to blame my drunkenness on! :D
@Phatsez - Hi to you too and thanks for reading! *Hands you beer*

Miss Cynical ღ Åйu ღ said...

nicely done!!~ :)

-Anu
ILMB

Kido said...

WOW! That was brilliant! :)

Applause Applause

Pesto Sauce said...

Wow! If this is a drunken stupor, wonder what alert rambling can be

Btw what were you drunk on...I too got drunk recently; read my stuff

Parikshith Kumar said...

Phenomenally brilliant poetry!

May you be doused with alcohol all your life, if you were to come up with such brilliant words in an inebriated state!

Cheers to you!

BIG Omi said...

Manu won the title!! CHelsea suckeyth suckery suckyeth !!

lostmermaid said...

Now the anger is gone
And fear is here instead



I hate wen this happens !!! wonderful post ! i liked it :)

BloggerMouth said...

@Omie - And who won the FA Cup? Mancs suck!

@Lost- Thanks :) Glad you could relate